Original date: 08/06/2016
Apparently, the Justin Bieber stories ("Rage and Revenge") didn't meet your expectations. The second part currently holds a rating of 2.7/5 (12 votes), and six readers rated it "awful" (1 star).
What is it that you didn't like about the story? Is it the plot, the violence, the characters?
The way I see it there are 3 options:
A. Start over
A new story with a new plot. No Gio, no Mafia, no permanent damage. (Of course the existing stories will remain there for you to read.)
B. Revise and rewrite
Leave the first part ("Rage") as it is, and change the second part ("Revenge"). I would leave the plot intact and do away with the gag so that Justin Bieber has a speaking role.
C. Move on
Leave everything as it is and move on to the next story.
Now I need your help. What do you want? Let me know by leaving a comment or sending me an email (alex@ballbustingboys.com)!
Update 08(09/2016:
Thank you so much for your feedback! I received dozens of emails and comments - thank you very much for sharing your opinion about how to go on from here.
There doesn't seem to be a consensus, many of you want me to go with Option B, many others want me to go with Option A, and some want to just move on because Justin Bieber was never their choice to begin with...
So what am I going to do now? Well, I'm going to do all of it.
That's right: You'll get a revised version of "Revenge" (to be published on Monday), and I'm going to write a new story featuring Justin Bieber and some of the regular Ballbusting Boys in a more playful and lighthearted story that will be completely unrelated to "Rage and Revenge". I hope I'll be able to publish that one in the next couple of weeks.
And then we'll move on to other adventures... :-))
Again, thank you very much for your feedback! Your opinion means a lot to me!
30 comments:
i didn't like the plot , justin wasnt described well.In my opinion it was a normal brutal ballbusting story and the guys name was justin bieber.I think you should startover
Didn't like Justin
keep the brutal, dark elements (they were great)! but you need to do over the second part. the mafia involvement and not giving Bieber any dialogue made it read weird. I think just Gio, overpowering Beiber and enacting his revenge by himself, with Bieber fighting and yelling back along the way, would be much more powerful.
infact, maybe just remove the gag ... maybe that is the crux of it all.
I didn't like the brutal ballbusting, rather would have a playful justin or at least no permanent damage.
I didn't read the whole story to be honest (I also didn't vote as can't vote on something I've not fully read) but the brutality/permanent damage put me off wanting to read more. Didn't really get the plot either.
Totally my personal opinion, this is your site and your stories - you do what you want :-) ... Plenty of other stories on the site to read that I love.
I loved the brutality of it, but it should be redone at the very least. As much as I love the concept of JB getting strapped and gagged, it really shouldn't be in the story. There isn't much that can be done if he is strapped and gagged, it's very linear. The first part is okay I think, since the JB busting is the most important part, but it should be revised at the very least.
I like brutal ballbusting, but no permanent damage, because is not realistic: your stories are exciting for their realism... The story is perfect without the two balls-burst...
P.s.: Sorry for my poor english, I'm Italian follower XD
I wasn't as keen on the brutality of this one. I prefer a lot of the more low key less permanent ones
I also did not like the permanent damage aspect of the story. Those aren't the stories that brought me to your site. I do recognize that other people have different tastes so I usually skip them and wait for another story.
If you rewrite, I would just take out the permanent damage in part 1. The rest of it was good and keep Bieber's entourage because I think they are what empowers him in his bad behavior.
For the second part, I would keep Gio but drop his two mafia buddies. I would make it a one on one without the gag and more dialog. Alone, I think Bieber would be at Gio's mercy and MUCH pain should be delivered, without permanent damage.
I think some gay action would make it better
Yeaaah some homosexuality would be greatttttt!!!!!!!!!!!
I think the argument of brutality/dark vs playful is a just one, and I understand the fine line you must write in order to please both communities
HOWEVER, I'd like to point out that in aaaallll of the celebrity guest stories, this is the only one with brutality and dark themes, and I think those who appreciate can at least have one. While I fully support those who didn't like it to voice their opinions, I'd have to say that the majority of this site features none-brutality, and I think the community who likes these themes can be allowed one celebrity story featuring these themes.
I think you should move on. i personally prefer no story about justin bieber, and just someone else that was on the poll but thats just me i guess
I didn't think there was enough build up before it got pretty intense. A little dark for my taste but know people want all different things. I say C, move on to a new story :)
find your story cool , my dream would be b and c , wanna see justin really castrated
Dark works for me, however I don't like the idea of the other mafia guys etc. Would be better if Gio had maybe enlisted the help of some of his mates (the Ballbusting Boys) to help out.
Maybe whilst Bieber is tied up to begin with (letting you keep the first story mostly intact), but instead you could have (Kev and Ben?) untie him and he has to do a 4-way fight against (say, Kev, Ben, Zach and Logan). But it does become dark and brutal as Bieber obviously would lose pretty badly in such a contest.
I didn't vote, but in your options, I'd say A (but still fairly brutal) or B.
ScotLad
You know, I've changed my mind, either A or C.
I realised I've read the other story and had completely forgotten it.
ScotLad
b or c
I'm apparently in the minority that liked the stories, (gave both of them 5 stars). The one thing I would have liked to have seen different though would have been involvement from some of the main characters, it just felt kind of off not having any established characters. Still liked them and as someone else has suggested, if you had just changed the mafia to being some of the boys helping Gio I would say they were perfect.
Thanks for your comments, guys! I really appreciate your feedback, and I have made up my mind (see updated post). I hope it will make everybody happy (or at least a bit happier...)! :-))
I can only say what interests me I won't pretend it's any opinion but mine. But I'd like to see Bieber's torture be a bit more fun for the torturers and a bit longer lasting. Here's an Idea: Pick the six more evil and devious members of the Ballbusting Boys gang. Give each of them a day with Bieber to devise the most painful, humiliating, ball-aching tortures imaginable. After each has had their turn with him, and objective judge decides who was the most creatively sadistic. The winner gets to enlist the others in one last special session with Bieber that leaves him psychologically(if not physically) emasculated, publicly humiliated and (worst of all), oddly craving more.
Don't be hard on yourself man, it was a great story, as all the ones you wright are, but it's Justin bieber, I think the half of us that don't want to sleep with him, would want him to suffer long and slow, hell,rape him till he begs to be nutted. My personal fantasy would be to use his nuts like rains while I split his ass in two, but that's just me :)
Thanks for all the great stories man
ps, you could even find away to give Gio justin's nuts, of maybe just one, That way the "good guy" with the nice cock, is in working order again
Thanks for your feedback, guys!
@Richard: i like your suggestion and I'll think about it! :-))
@Jeff: Don't worry, I'm not beating myself up over this. In fact, I really appreciate the feedback. I wasn't too happy with the story in the first place, and I undrstand why some readers were disappointed. So everything is fine. :-))
About your ps suggestion: I kinda like the idea, maybe I can work it into the revised version. We'll see... :-))
Thanks so much for putting in the effort to please everyone! Not all writers would do that, we're all grateful!
Thanks for your comment! I'm glad you enjoy the blog! Your feedback means a lot to me! :-))
Try to put Justin mistreating too. I want to read it kicking, stomping, shaking ... It would be cool and without permanent damage.
Thanks for your feedback! The new story will mainly be about Justin Bieber's balls getting busted but I'll see if I can include a scene of Justin Bieber busting balls as well... :-))
I hope my comment doesn't come too late, but as with the previous comments and ideas, I can only speak for myself and for my preferences:
I enjoyed the first part of your Justin Bieber story and would keep it unaltered. However, the second story was definitely not a success. So, the way I see it, would be for unmanned Gio to empower Justin completely, perhaps with the help of a tutor or a supporter/sidekick. I somewhat understand other readers' dislike for permanent damage but this is Justin ******* Bieber we are taking about! And besides Gio with his beautiful balls now gone forever NEEDS to have his full revenge. So, J.B.'s balls (IMHO) cannot, must not, see the light of day! If something can be omitted from the original "gore" then it should be the cutting of J.B.'s cock. Let's keep it in place only for it to become a noodle like Gio's. I keep on hoping to read a story where J.B. can peg Gio to spare his celebrity balls only to have them obliterated violently in the end.
Keep up the good work, Alex!
-Stefan
PS. One more addition to a previous comment: implanting J.B.'s ball or balls into Gio's scrotum could also mean spreading J.B.'s DNA in the future. Or it could just mean a nice and clean revenge in which J.B.'s would have to make the ultimate sacrifice know to men in order to pay his debt to Gio. The second option sounds perfect at least to me! :)
Thanks for your feedback, Stefan. Unfortunately I have just finished writing the revised story, and I don't have the time to make any changes before it's going online on Monday. I hope you'll like the revised story better than the original one, even though it won't include your ideas...
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