tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7108853281243947863.post3947354971288217294..comments2024-03-27T14:15:47.847+01:00Comments on Ballbusting Boys: Pankration - match 2: Nico vs Pollux (written by Harry)Alexhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09680695403921899260noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7108853281243947863.post-52478872992366265202020-05-23T02:19:09.008+02:002020-05-23T02:19:09.008+02:00Lol don't get mad! I'm sure Nico still has...Lol don't get mad! I'm sure Nico still has some fight left in him. Harryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00512022878556088819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7108853281243947863.post-69784384415340025892020-05-21T23:24:07.744+02:002020-05-21T23:24:07.744+02:00I swear if best boy Nico doesn't get justice b...I swear if best boy Nico doesn't get justice before all this ends, I'ma be so mad.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7108853281243947863.post-67138686068086891722020-05-20T05:29:53.555+02:002020-05-20T05:29:53.555+02:00Reg, I am grateful for your feedback bro! More lik...Reg, I am grateful for your feedback bro! More like I'm humbled that you took the time to read it twice, and I totally hear you about the dialog. Dialog is something that I admire so much in Alex's stories, because his characters really speak in their own voices. I feel like now that I've introduced more of these characters, it will hopefully be easier to do dialog, but that is a Harryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00512022878556088819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7108853281243947863.post-16769125425857376712020-05-20T01:06:36.173+02:002020-05-20T01:06:36.173+02:00I read through the story again and in fact there i...I read through the story again and in fact there is a fair bit of fine dialogue...it is really just in the ballbusting sequences where some more dialogue could help in my opinion. As someone else commented, it helps to express the pain and anguish of the victim. <br />Outstanding work.<br />Reg<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7108853281243947863.post-86967262220220028392020-05-19T17:22:13.454+02:002020-05-19T17:22:13.454+02:00Harry, this is an amazing story! I love that you m...Harry, this is an amazing story! I love that you made Pollux and Castor into the "bad guys" and i loved how they (allegedly) cheated and got away with it this time, i didn't see that coming! These twins are so damn hot and i hope they get their beautiful nuts crunched again soon...i guess we will find out if the twins really lack stamina, especially after their "twins" Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7108853281243947863.post-31100425530106065162020-05-19T13:34:39.504+02:002020-05-19T13:34:39.504+02:00I'm so happy you found my comment useful! And ...I'm so happy you found my comment useful! And I'm so excited to know that you'll follow some of my suggestions, thank you so much. I would like to add an other consideration: when the fight ends I think you should focus the attention on the pain in the boys' balls. It would be so exciting and a little bit realistic since these hot studs have their balls tortured. At the end of Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7108853281243947863.post-28963388601593918412020-05-19T06:37:12.581+02:002020-05-19T06:37:12.581+02:00Jimmy, thanks for your feedback! I hadn't real...Jimmy, thanks for your feedback! I hadn't really thought about seeing the action through the eyes of the main characters, so that thought is really helpful. They do sort of comment on the next match in the series, so hopefully it will shake out in a similar way and hold the narrative together. <br /><br />Glad you liked the twins switching! I got a kick out of that. Since my stories are Harryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00512022878556088819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7108853281243947863.post-67090265566272963602020-05-19T04:48:30.869+02:002020-05-19T04:48:30.869+02:00Good evening Hunter,
What a great series you have...Good evening Hunter,<br /><br />What a great series you have written! This story is a lot stronger than the previous one because it involved both main characters. I love the twin switch, that was very clever. Even if the two main characters are not in the next few matches, do what you did with this one, and almost tell the story through their eyes. That gives the piece another layer and ties the Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7108853281243947863.post-49359143556966646202020-05-18T17:05:25.307+02:002020-05-18T17:05:25.307+02:00X, thanks for taking the time to leave such helpfu...X, thanks for taking the time to leave such helpful feedback! <br /><br />I'm really glad you like the characters, and I completely agree that romantic feelings might develop among some of these guys. With so many horny dudes in one place, it would be hard not to! I also hear you about mutual squeezing, that would be hot. I'll try to work that into a future story. <br /><br />I Harryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00512022878556088819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7108853281243947863.post-61257698724708953282020-05-18T15:35:14.402+02:002020-05-18T15:35:14.402+02:00This is litterally awesome! I love both characters...This is litterally awesome! I love both characters and when I read the contestants I was sure Nico would have win. The hits below the belt are more than in the first story, but I think they could be more. I'd love to see a fight in which there is a mutual ball squeeze by two of these studs. I love the relationship between Nico and Theo, they are cute and I hope there will be some romantic Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com